Carol A. Hand
When greeting the morning
the silver-toned song of a bird
got me wondering
How does one convey
the sounds of the city
engulfed in a misty fog
that amplifies sounds?
*
The whisper of leaves
in the breeze – sh-h-h-h-h
The sounds of workmen
replacing a neighbor’s roof –
with the tap-tap-tap of hammers
and the sharper rhythmic
sounds of a staple gun
The sound of the lawn mower
growing softer then louder
depending on the direction
of the unseen mower
whir-
r-
r-
r-
r-
r-
r- ing in the distance
*
Listening intently to the world
and trying to describe what one hears
on a silent page is not an easy task
and a challenge I will continue to ponder
*
Wow, Carol. This poem is richly layered and dimensional — from the softest whispers of nature to the staccato rhythms emitted from the roof, from the acme to the nadir of the lawnmower’s swath-path — a slow-mo doppler effect. And I love that concrete poem set within a
whir r ing,
as your silent page becomes a tapestry.
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Thank you so much for your lovely, thoughtful comments, Bill. I am grateful for your kindness. Sometimes, words and images flow through me from an unknown source. 🙂
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Each word evoked a striking, clearly recognized, and unambiguous image.
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Thank you for your kind words, dear friend. Words sent with kindness are treasures indeed (and in deed). 🙂
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I think you are good listener for the sound of the all living creatures, my earthling friend Carol! You are doing great things! 🙂
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Thank you so much for your kind words, Migo and WD. As you well know, listening deeply sometimes means were hear things that are tragic and painful. But sometimes, we are fortunate to hear things of great beauty that momentarily transport us to places of peace and joy. 🙂
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Yes! And sometimes we see your posts are like peaceful valleys, sometimes like blue and thoughtful mountains and sometimes joyfull like a garden where the birds are singing. Sometimes maybe all in one piece! But we are lucky that we are hearing all them via your ears.;)
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I am deeply honored and humbled by your kindness. Chi miigwetch (Ojibwe for thank you very much), dear fiend.
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We are honored to be with friends like you on the planet earth, my earthling friend! Aaapiji go miigwech! I hope it is right. I have copied from the dictionary. 😁
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Vibration of a bus, gasp of espresso machine, jackhammer..what you say when almost stepping in dog poop…
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Wonderful poem on the eve of the autumn solstice,dear Carol! 🙂
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Thank you so much for your lovely comments, Maria. 💜
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Greetings to Queenie, dear Carol! I hope he enjoys these bright September days! 🙂
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Instead of the “tap-tap-tap of hammers,” I am often greeted in the morning by the tap-tap-tap of a woodpecker drumming on a half-dead tree in a neighbor’s back yard. Music to my ears!
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Ah, the lovely sound of a woodpecker tapping, You are lucky, Mister Muse. It’s a much pleasanter way to greet the morning. 🙂
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Beautiful piece, Carol!
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Thank you for your kind words, Decker.
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Well done, Carol!
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Thank you for your kind words, Bette. ❤
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I can hear what you write, dear Carol. 💕
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Such a kind and lovely comment, Carrie. Thank you! 💜
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You have sharp hearing, Carol, and the words to go with it! Lovely poem, wonderful descriptions, some of which I could certainly identify with. Thanks for the verbal images.
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But your descriptions are very vivid Carol. I love the muffling and amplifying effect of fog.
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Thank you your thoughtful comments, Andrea, and for painting September so vividly in your always eloquent poetic prose.
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You did pretty good at capturing some of the sounds.
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Beautifully captured in words, Carol. Lovely poem. ❤
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It is always a gift to hear from you, Iris, Thank you so much for your kind and lovely comment. 💜
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Hi Carol! You captured it so beautifully! I felt like I was there and I could imagine the whole scene.
Hope you are well…as Fall starts her turn. Hard to believe summer is over already. This year has flown in places and dragged in others.
Hope the rest of your week is filled with wonder ❤
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Thank you so much for your kind and lovely comments, Lorrie. Sending my best wishes to you. 💜
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Beautiful thoughtful poem, Carol. (And certainly a good thing to try and ‘live in the moment’ for me (even without a fog 🙂 ) . lieve groetjes, Hanneke
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Thank you so much for your lovely comments, Hanneke, and for always lifting my spirit with your beautiful drawings and artwork. 💜
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🙂 Thanks so much Carol. Hope you’re having a wonderful day, Hanneke
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Thank you so much for your kindness, Hanneke. It’s evening here. now, after a rainy day. It was perfect weather for helping me be disciplined enough to sit at my computer grading student papers. I still have many more to go, but I am grateful for the chance to learn and maybe share something that will help students in the future. I hope you have a wonderful day, too. 💜
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Thank you for your reply, Carol. It’s lovely to hear. Funny how rain can have that effect. It’s raining here too. Earlier I did some spring cleaning with the ‘help’ of a very old cat, he’s such a character, very loving 🙂 . Hope there will be a bit of sunshine tomorrow as well for you, lieve groetjes, Hanneke
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