Carol A. Hand
A
Peaceful morning
Gentle Autumn Light
A cool breeze whispers
The blooming translucent clematis dances
Captures sun creating moving shadows below
Children are on their way to school
Passing by on the sidewalk now
Lost in thoughts perhaps dreaming
Of things to come
Let them find
Peaceful times
Ahead
Acknowledgments:
This poem was written in response to an assignment for Writing 101 – to count words in order to learn how to convey ideas as simply as possible. It turned out to be a fascinating challenge. After thinking about the myriad of ways it could be approached, I was at a loss. It wasn’t until I sat quietly on my front porch, drinking my morning coffee, that the ordinary beauty inspired me. When typing out the words that flowed, I decided to take the assignment literally. Each line increases by one word, and then decreases likewise. Like the sights of my brief morning reflection, brief memories of one unique experience are recorded in a bubble of time.
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Your words nicely capture nature, dancing her way into another day as gen-next takes another step on road to future…
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Such lovely, poetic comments, Raj. Thank you! I was just rereading your powerful essay, “Welcome,” and the profound messages about our need to be aware of our interdependence with our environment, the flora that help us breathe, and all others who share this small planet.
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I liked the structure of the poem, it’s very different from what I am used to reading – it starts short and becomes longer and then becomes short again. Very visually appealing! 🙂
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I appreciate your thoughtful comments. I wanted to take this prompt seriously, while also creating something meaningful and playful. I counted the number of words in each phrase to convey my morning observations and reflections. 🙂
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This is so lovely, Carol! 🙂 ❤
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Thank you, Natalie. Your kind words mean a great deal to me 🙂 ❤
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What a sweet thing to say, Carol! Thank you so much. 🙂 ❤
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This is lovely, Carol, very much enjoyed your poem!
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Thank you so much, Sonya. ❤
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Your poem is simple yet so powerful. It evokes a very vividly uplifting image in my mind and makes my heart dance like a Dervish 🙂
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Thank you for the lovely imagery, Writer from the East. With so much suffering in the world, we all need reminders that make our hearts dance.
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Indeed. I agree with you 🙂
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What an interesting structure! Yet within its strict confines, your words flow naturally, with vivid imagery. Lovely!
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Thank you for your thoughtful comments, Hildegard. I wanted to try something new in response to the assignment for Writing 101 – to “count words.” Each sentence adds a word until it reaches a total of seven, and then the number decreases by one. I was fortunate to greet a morning that provided just the right inspirations.
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It is meaningful and playful. Interesting way to write. It’s difficult?
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Thank you for your thoughtful comments, Indira. It was my way of responding to the ‘word count” assignment for Writing 101 today. Each sentence adds a word until the total is seven, and the following lines each decrease by one word. Figuring out how to respond to today’s assignment was the hardest part for me because some of my posts are extraordinarily long and complex, and others are very short. As I sat on my front porch to greet the morning today, watching what was happening, the words started to flow. It was just a matter of seeing how to express things in a different type of structure. I like the symmetry of both the visual appearance and the beginning and ending thoughts, but the words and images just seemed to flow once the idea of the structure came to mind.
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It’s very nice.
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Thank you 🙂
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Beautiful Carol, Thank you!!!
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Many thanks, Hector 🙂
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Thank YOU Carol!!
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A wonderful sentiment!
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Thank you, Melissa ❤
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Powerful and heartfelt words! And the way your structured it is just awesome!
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Thank you for your lovely comments, Rosema 🙂
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You’re welcome, Carol! It’s my pleasure. 🙂
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I nominated you for the Blogger Recognition Award. Please check it here. http://arealmessybeautifultwistedsunshine.com/2015/09/23/blogger-recognition-award/.
xoxo,
Pancake Bunnykins
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Thank you for your kindness, Pancake. I appreciate it a great deal ❤
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